Week 8 Blog Reviews

Week 8 Blog Reviews

Ashley: In your blog entitled, “Leave Marriage Alone” I thought you did a really great job of incorporating the opinions and facts that were offered in our readings that week. The quotes and pieces from the readings used really enhanced the point you were trying to make. I felt like your title was setting me up to hear all about how marriage should remain within our society, but after reading your post I got a negative response from the topic. You pointed out many of the hardships and issues that the union of marriage is facing today which counteracts your original title. Your introduction paragraph also focused a great deal on the “heterosexual” aspect of marriage, but in reality most thoughts on the subject ended there. If you re-organized your essay, as well as changed your title I think you would have a very thought-out, supported essay.

Your other blog post, “Are you listening to me?” really hit home for me (as you can tell by my past post). I thought it was really interesting how you incorporated authors from last week as well as your own personal experiences in order to make an interesting and more solid argument. I also really liked how you made a reading suggestion for those of us who deal with similar issues. I agree that Tannen is biased within her article and that we as readers should not believe everything an author puts in front of us. I felt like your essay jumped from topics a great deal though, starting with same sex friendships then going to relationship communication, and then discussing things within marriage. My only suggestions would be to really focus on one specific topic and really drive your point home. Great writing this week!

Jess: In your essay, “Are you just Hearing?” I thought you made really good points as well as used personal experiences to prove those ideas. I also really enjoyed how you brought in a different idea regarding the topic of you may be hearing but you just are not listening. I thought your piece might have been more successful if you had really incorporated things from the male point of view. You mentioned how women respond in conversation and when they listen but did not really discuss what men do.

In the “Evolution of Relationships” I really liked all of your support for your arguments. You used Disney movies, our readings, as well as statistics to really show how our society is as well as what we believe in now. I also like how you chose not to defend one side of the argument, but rather proved points for both sides. I’m not sure about the small section directly below your essay, maybe just a typo? I would try to just narrow your topic down into something you can go in great depth about instead of discussing so many different topics. Overall, great job this week! I look forward to reading your writing as well.