Week 10 Blog Reviews

Deirdre Cienki: I really enjoyed your first post regarding all the different point of views of those traveling on a bridge in New York. I liked how you kept the reader hanging while you went on to explain another aspect and point of view of the story. That “cliffhanger” idea really works and is a great deal of fun to read. My only suggestion would have been to take out one particular story in order to develop the other pieces of the post more. While it was exciting and kept me hooked, it also left me hanging because I felt like there were more details about the people as well as the product that could have been explained.
I think the title to your second post is so clever! It really captures the essence of part of the music industry today. I agree with your statement which mentions the fact that although most people believe it is unacceptable for others to call women such demeaning names, but as long as the music sells it won’t matter. You made strong points within your post but I thought it ended quite abruptly. I wanted to read more about the topic and other issues our society is facing if we continue to support music and other facets of life even though they do not follow the morals and ideals we live by. Good Work this week!

Jess: I’m excited to see if you’ll change your background to something for thanksgiving! I really liked your story regarding the on sale tennis racket! I know that has happened to all of us: we believe we have gotten the deal of the century, but in reality there is always a catch! The whole story kept me really hooked throughout and I also liked how you tied the idea having a new racket to being a better player, which turned out to be untrue. I wish you could have incorporated more products into your story, but it sounded like this tennis racket was the only thing that could have made the day! Great Job! P.S. Don’t forget to do both posts! =)

Lauren: I really liked your title “Parental Advisory.” I’m really going to have to start getting clever with my titles in order to keep up with everyone! I liked how you tied in the fact that hip hop has really taken over the globe because it is such an influence and driving force in the modern world. Overall, you made really great comments regarding this topic but I felt like the post itself was too short. I wanted to hear more opinions and thought on the subject, but it seemed just to fall short. My suggestion would be to really sum up all your ideas or create an ending that really drives your point across. Your second post was so graphic! I was not anticipating such a vivid description, but you made me feel like I was in the room which is impressive. I also liked the ending and how the uncle finished what he started regardless of injury. My only advice would be to incorporate more products or elements to the story in order to really create irony like the author did. Great job this week!